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Writing a Thinking Essay

Creating Positive Change: an Essay about Action

When selecting a personal statement, University of California staff look for interesting topics.  One of their favorite UC essay prompts is the following:

“Describe a time when you questioned an established practice or thought within an organization. How did your actions create positive change?”

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A Sample “Thinking Essay”

At my high school school, we used to have two separate proms every year.  In the past, it had been a very divided school on racial grounds.  The black kids only hung out with the other black kids, and the white kids with the white.  But that had changed in recent decades in most ways . . . except for prom.

Every year it was the same—there was a black prom and a white prom.  They didn’t call them that, of course, but it was obvious which was which.  No one was officially prevented from attending either prom, but no one broke the mold either.  There were a few exceptions, but very few.

Everyone saw it, but no one did anything about it.  Finally I was sick of it.  My senior year, as class president, I decided to switch from two proms to one prom.  It was difficult at first, and we ran into a lot of resistance from parents, but in the end we came together for one event as a united student body and had a great time.  Now, hopefully, the last remnants of the tradition of racism have been washed away.

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